Doe this make sense so far...im not happy with the audience bit!?

Audience





I would suggest the audience for my piece of original writing to be young children, aged around twelve or thirteen years old. This is because the story is written in simple English vocabulary, with no difficult complex sentences. This is why it appeals to children that find reading difficult because the lexis is simple and also the story line is easy to follow. Having an uncomplicated story line would keep those children who don’t like reading intrigued because is not complicated.

Doe this make sense so far...im not happy with the audience bit!?
This piece of original writing is aimed at young children, of approximately twelve or thirteen years of age. The story is written in simple English vocabulary, without complex sentences. It will appeal to children who find reading difficult, or don't like to read, because the lexis is simple and the story line is easy to follow.
Reply:Have you read any Harry Potter? These are books much favoured by the age group you mention and yet they could hardly be described as simple and uncomplicated. Don't categorise all children as unable to understand complex plots and characters. Of course avoid language that is too 'highbrow' but don't talk down to your readers.
Reply:I would suggest:





My writing is aimed at young people aged between thirteen and fourteen years of age. The story is written in a language which they can understand and relate to. It is uncomplicated and yet intriguing, guaranteed to keep even the the reluctant reader turning the pages.





I would keep out words like simple and easy because some teenagers may find it condescending. Also they don't like being called children, the politically correct term is young people! lol The secret is to keep them on your side with your description.